The last one will be better when you make the changes you talked about. Try to look for a common link and make it read throughout (like the colored tabs as the Holy Spirit). I like not seeing their faces too. :) Repost when you do this.
I wrote a novel as a reply and decided to email it instead. Basically:
I think you need to come up with a really specific, strong thesis. Seeing them all together now the Audience of One is too vague AND has nothing to do with the images.
The chair repeated is a good idea but again that needs to connect with your thesis. The idea behind this has to be the really solid foundation or else the visual side won't hold up at all.
Go through each one individually and describe it, with sentences or adjectives, and look for similarities afterwards and come up with a new statement. The pieces are Very Strong but need some direction.
My daughter's prof at SMU often says "If you leave it up to audience interpretation you have failed." You have to show them what to feel/think. Right now, one cannot tell. I think if you show it to some people who have not seen it you will see that I am right. We have time however to get it right!
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ReplyDeleteMy favorites are the first and last
ReplyDeleteThe one on top is much, much better. I think you need to post your theme sentence here so we can see if it's working.
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ReplyDeleteThe last one will be better when you make the changes you talked about. Try to look for a common link and make it read throughout (like the colored tabs as the Holy Spirit). I like not seeing their faces too. :) Repost when you do this.
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ReplyDeleteI think your idea is commendable and I give you high praise for it!!
ReplyDeleteI wrote a novel as a reply and decided to email it instead. Basically:
DeleteI think you need to come up with a really specific, strong thesis. Seeing them all together now the Audience of One is too vague AND has nothing to do with the images.
The chair repeated is a good idea but again that needs to connect with your thesis. The idea behind this has to be the really solid foundation or else the visual side won't hold up at all.
Go through each one individually and describe it, with sentences or adjectives, and look for similarities afterwards and come up with a new statement. The pieces are Very Strong but need some direction.
My daughter's prof at SMU often says "If you leave it up to audience interpretation you have failed." You have to show them what to feel/think.
Right now, one cannot tell. I think if you show it to some people who have not seen it you will see that I am right. We have time however to get it right!